雅思寫作范文

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老規(guī)矩，以下是正文目錄：     

1，題目

2，審題

3，高分范文

4，范文朗讀

5，范文地道詞匯中英對照，包括：

• 題目改述
• 觀點類大作文高分句型
• 展示“詞匯豐富度”的詞匯&短語
• 展示“連貫與銜接”的詞匯&句型 

題目：

In some countries, old people who retire from work spend money on themselves (e.g. holiday) rather than save money for their children. Is this a positive or negative development?

審題：

• Type:  Opinion 觀點類大作文 (我的觀點：generally negative)

• Body 1: elderly should enjoy themselves however should ensure there is an inheritance

• Body 2: children may expect to be supported by parents/still parents have a duty to assist

• Key words: rather than / development

- Model Answer 高分范文 & 范文朗讀 -

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In some nations, the elderly use their retirement savings to enjoy themselves instead of ensuring their children have an inheritance. In my opinion, while senior citizens should pursue methods of enjoyment, the trend of only spending on themselves without passing on their wealth to their offspring is a deleterious trend. 

One of the main reasons cited for why retirees should spend on extravagances, such as holiday cruises and vacation homes, is that there is a belief that the aged have ‘served their time’ working, and thus deserve their retirement to be spent in pleasure. While this is undoubtedly reasonable, parents, who are also most likely grandparents, should insist that a sizeable portion of their assets and savings are inherited by their children, and by proxy, their grandchildren. This continuation of wealth accumulation is the primary method used by family units to secure a successful and prosperous progeny, and to ensure that a family’s bloodline continues to flourish. 

It can also be argued that by promising the younger generation an inheritance, they will expect not just a financial legacy, but also handouts and may even expect this type of support as adults. Despite this claim, however, this situation is rare, since for most, it is clear one must become financially independent. Nevertheless, in order to make life easier and less of a struggle, parents should still do their best to guarantee wealth is passed down, and in matters of great importance, such as buying a house, they should have the funds available to assist their children. In this way, parents can better enable their offspring to thrive, rather than just survive. 

In conclusion, while those in their golden years should have every right to enjoy themselves, they should also ensure that the future generation is financially safeguarded, and so in my opinion, the phenomenon of retirees lavishly spending on their own gratification without consideration for their children’s future lives is a negative development.

- Essay Analysis 范文解析 -

- (1) Introduction 

Paraphrasing from the Statement/Question 題目改述:

• In some countries = In some nations

• old people = the elderly

• who retire from work spend money = use their retirement savings 

• spend money on themselves = use…savings to enjoy themselves

• rather than = instead of

• save money for their children = children have an inheritance

Standard Phrase for the “Opinion” type essay 觀點類大作文高分句型：

• In some nations 在一些國家
• In my opinion, while 在我看來，
• is a deleterious trend 不好的趨勢 (deleterious相當于harmful)

Words showing Cohesion (C&C) 展示“連貫與銜接”的詞匯和短語:

• their

• to

• instead of

• , while

• , the

• only

• themselves

• without

Vocabulary 高分地道詞匯和短語：

• retirement savings 退休儲蓄；退休金
• inheritance 繼承
• senior citizens 老年人
• offspring 后代
• deleterious 有害的

- (2) Body 1 -

Aspects that must be referred to 這段需要提到：

• Elderly parents should be able to enjoy themselves, but should also ensure an inheritance for their children

Standard IELTS essay phrase 雅思高頻句型：

• One of the main reasons cited for why

Vocabulary and Collocations 高分地道詞匯和短語：

• cited 被認為是；引用
• retirees 退休人員
• extravagances 揮霍；奢侈
• holiday cruises 度假郵輪
• vacation homes 度假屋
• the aged 老人
• ‘served their time’ 工作了一生
• insist 堅持
• a sizeable portion of 很大一部分
• inherited by 由……繼承
• and by proxy =  through another way = the implication is = is an intermediary for 
• continuation of 延續(xù)
• wealth accumulation 積累財富
• the primary method 主要方式
• family units 家族
• secure 保衛(wèi)；保證；確保
• prosperous 繁榮的；興旺的
• progeny 子孫；后代
• family’s bloodline 家族血脈
• to flourish 興旺；昌盛

Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C) 展示“連貫與銜接”的詞匯和短語：

• for why

• , such as

• , is that

• there

• that

• , and thus

• their

• to be spent in

• While this

• undoubtedly

• , who

• also

• , should

• by their

• , and by proxy,

• this

• used by

• to

• and

• , and to ensure that

• continues to

- (3) Body 2 -
Aspects that must be referred to 這段需要提到：

• Though some may argue that promising an inheritance may spoil the offspring, parents still have a duty to help support their progeny

Standard IELTS essay phrase 雅思高頻句型：

• It can also be argued that

Vocabulary and Collocations 高分地道詞匯和短語：

• a financial legacy 遺產(chǎn)
• handouts 捐贈；贈送品
• financially independent 經(jīng)濟獨立
• less of a struggle 沒那么煎熬
• passed down 傳遞；傳下去
• in matters of great importance 很重要的事
• assist 協(xié)助
• enable 使能夠
• to thrive 發(fā)展；興盛

Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C) 展示“連貫與銜接”的詞匯和短語：

• also 

• that by

• , they

• not just…, but also

• even expect this

• Despite this claim, however, this

• , since for

• , it

• one

• become

• Nevertheless, in order to

• should still

• , and in matters of

• , such as

• , they should

• to

• Their

• In this way

• better

• , rather than just

- (4) Conclusion -

Standard IELTS essay phrase 雅思高頻句型：

• In conclusion, 

• in my opinion

Vocabulary and Collocations 高分地道詞匯和短語：

• golden years 退休時期
• should have every right to 有權(quán)……
• safeguarded 保障
• the phenomenon of ……現(xiàn)象
• lavishly spending on 大手腳花錢；揮霍
• gratification 滿足
• without consideration for 不考慮

Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C) 展示“連貫與銜接”的詞匯和短語：

• while those
• their
• themselves
• they should also ensure that
• , and so
• their own

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