對于大部分考生而言，如果能夠了解托福考官的“紅線”到底在哪里，就相當(dāng)于有了一個“避坑”指南，也能更好找準回答的方向。

其實在托福官方《OG》中，就有明確說明托福評分人在寫作科目中最反感的行為！如果你的寫作成績一直不理想，不如看看自己是不是踩到了這些“雷區(qū)”...

01
冗長累贅的首尾段

很多學(xué)生為了增加字數(shù)，會選擇死記硬背或者是直接套用一些現(xiàn)成的句子，想方設(shè)法讓評分人眼前一亮，但是實際上評分人非常不看好累贅的首尾段，比如：

The importance of the issue raised by the posed statement, namely creating a new holiday for people, cannot be underestimated, as it concerns the very fabric of society. As it stands, the issue of creating a new holiday raises profound implications for the future. However, although the subject matter in general cannot be dismissed lightheartedly, the perspective of the issue as presented by the statement raises certain qualms regarding practical application.

In conclusion, although I have to accept that it is imperative that something bedone about creating a new holiday for people and find the underlying thrust of the implied proposal utterly convincing, I cannot help but feel wary of taking such irrevocable steps and personally feel that a more measured approach would be more rewarding.

02
一味堆砌詞匯

和以上兩段類似，除了冗長的首尾段，評分人也不喜歡堆砌大量詞語并且沒有針對論點展開論述：
At the heart of any discussion regarding an issue pertaining to creating a new holiday, it has to be borne in mind that a delicate line has to be trod when dealing with such matters. The human resources involved in such matters cannot be guaranteed regardless of all the good intentions that may be lavished. While it is true that creat-ing a new holiday might be a viable and laudable remedy, it is transparently clear thatapplied wrongly such a course of action could be calamitous and compound the prob-lem rather than provide a solution.

僅使用大量單詞敘述，即使作文寫到300甚至400詞，沒有語法錯誤，但整個段落空洞，沒有實質(zhì)內(nèi)容，在考官眼里只能得到1-2分（5分滿分）

03
結(jié)構(gòu)不清晰

評分人會非常重視考生的文章結(jié)構(gòu)，如果一篇作文結(jié)構(gòu)嚴謹，讀者就能毫無障礙地從頭讀到尾。

托福寫作中要進行分段寫作，所以運用有效過渡可以幫助讀者跟上作者的思路。但僅僅使用“first”“second”這樣的連接詞并不能保證作文結(jié)構(gòu)的嚴謹流暢，還要注意讓所有的觀點與文章的主題相關(guān)，緊扣中心思想。

Recently, there is a big debate on the issue that telling the truth or not is the mostimportant consideration in the relationship between people. For my experience, lthink telling a truth is the most important consideration in people's relationship. lnthe following,I will illustrate my opinion by two reasons.

First of all, honest make the trust stronger between friends or colleages. As weknow, if people tell a lie to others he will not be trusted, When he tell a truth, otherswill believe that he tells a lie. For example, a person who is honest to others, canget real help and get trust of others.

Secondly, telling a lie always makes things worse not only in work but also infamily life. When somebody do something wrong in his job he should annouce hismistake to his manager. lf he don't do that others may continue their jobs base onthe mistake. Consequently, the work will be worse and worse.

On the contrary, sometimes it is better to tell a lie to others, such as telling a lieto a patient. As we know, the sick become worse when a cancer patient know hisillness. A good way to protect their life is to tell a lie. So that many doctors will nottell the truth to a dying patient.

To sum up, people should tell the truth to maintain their relationship with otherpeople, although sometimes people have to tell a lie. People can get trust whenthey are honest to others.

這篇文章得到2分，雖然文章很長用了很多例子，但是每一個觀點都是獨立發(fā)展的，聯(lián)系很薄弱，讓讀者在看文章的時候感到困惑。

換句話說，文章要有統(tǒng)一性。評分原則中提到了“統(tǒng)一性”、“漸進性”和“連貫性”，這些都是評估作文結(jié)構(gòu)是否嚴謹、讀者能否比較容易跟上作者思路的標準。

要得高分，條理清晰的銜接非常重要，建議大家可以多看一看范文，積累一些好用的過渡詞。

04
語言運用不和諧

語言運用也是重要的評分標準，想要得高分，作文中必須要體現(xiàn)語言運用的和諧流暢。作文的句子應(yīng)該結(jié)構(gòu)多樣，用詞應(yīng)該貼切得體，符合詞性和語境，并保持風(fēng)格統(tǒng)一。

比如要表達“這名年輕女孩高挑苗條”，有的同學(xué)可能會寫：This young girl is tall and skinny. 

skinny這個詞乍看之下確實挺“高大上”的，但用得不好，因為它一般用來形容人瘦得跟皮包骨頭似的，是一個貶義詞，而句子要表達的意思應(yīng)該是褒義，這里正確的用詞應(yīng)該是slim/slender。

評分人還會評估句子結(jié)構(gòu)的復(fù)雜程度以及考生所使用詞匯的數(shù)量和復(fù)雜程度。使用非常簡單的句子結(jié)構(gòu)和非常基本的詞匯，就不可能表達比較復(fù)雜的觀點。

因此如果考生寫出的作文語言難懂、句子簡單、詞匯量有限，那么無論觀點多么令人印象深刻，得分也不會超過3分。

總體來說在獨立寫作方面，評分人很看重觀點的質(zhì)量以及陳述觀點的有效性。會從考生如何展開觀點、組織文章結(jié)構(gòu)以及語言運用來評估考生作文質(zhì)量，所以大家在寫作時可以基于以上幾點進行文章展開~

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